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Sunday, January 13, 2008

Playing the bottom card too soon

The Untold Story

It was an average morning
Sometime in February
Unremarkable sunrise
Certainly not the kind of thing that would call out amateur photographers
The poets were still hung over
So only the factory workers were missing it
A body floating above the horizon
Purple and slowly desiccating

Was it only a mirage
A reflection of a life just ending
A curiously well formed cloud
Whose alligator skin flaked into the contrail of a fast moving exhaust from the future
He couldn’t quite tell
Every time he raised the glasses
Thoughts got in the way
His oatmeal was burning

The phone rang
It was his mother
Nothing interesting
Then the sun broke through pierced his retina with a concentrated photon blast
Knocked him to the floor
So this was what it was like
He was between breaths
The next never came

He was the only eye witness
No one to tell it to
Unreported news
It took only 27 lines in a the C section of a newspaper he never read
God’s beta son gone
His underwear still in the washer
Ready to be put on
A modest world

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Anonymous Anonymous said...

tetrahedron cool, like the poem, a careful blend of the fantastical and mundane, he has slipped out of our world for a moment and given the first image, the prognosis is not good, knocked flat by a flash of light, great poem, original, intelligent, well crafted, careful control over tone, colours purple, grey, flash of light, supercool,

5:42 AM  
Blogger paisley said...

it certainly has me wondering... but then i have never even heard the word, tetrahedron......

7:29 AM  
Blogger tumblewords said...

Unusual and doubly provocative with chuckles thrown in the mix. The title is perfectly tied to the final lines. IMHO

2:08 PM  
Blogger Linda said...

Interesting shape to this poem with that long bolded middle line! Lots of good images in here.

7:49 PM  
Blogger HL said...

IMHO you are one adroit reader tumblewords. Now

8:41 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Wow. You are much more ambitious than I am. This did send me on a search, though, for my Experimental Animated Visual Poem: http://www.sbpoet.com/2006/09/an_experimental.html

Perhaps you'll have inspired me to try something a bit ... edgier.

9:44 PM  
Blogger SweetTalkingGuy said...

What a way to go... and the sound effect widget enhances the imagination even further!

9:52 AM  

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